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教你留学申请文书写作与简历

  写essay写简历都是一大头疼的项目,很多小伙伴往往不知道怎么下手。其实只要慎用美式英语中一些含有特殊意义的词汇,适当地变换句子的长短就能让你的文章突出,而且还要避免在推荐信中提到申请者的外貌!在这里,让无锡慧谷留学资深专家彭老师给大家一些建议。

  1. 变换句子的长短

  Vary the length of the sentences in your essay. If you have written several longsentences in a row, insert a short sentence to give the reader a break. Varietyin your sentences will make your essay easier to read (and thus morememorable).

  It also demonstrates that you have a superior command of theEnglish language. And don’t be afraid of including a one-sentence paragraph. Aone-sentence paragraph (especially at the beginning or end of your essay) willbe very dramatic and grab the reader’s attention.

  变换句子的长短。如果你已经连续用了几个长句,那么插入一个短句能给读者一个停顿的时间。句式多样化能够使你的短文更容易懂,因而也更容易让人记住。这样的句式变换也证明你的英语语言掌握的比较好。同时不要害怕运用一句式段落。一句式段落,(尤其是在短文的开头结尾)会很出彩,也会吸引读者的注意力。

  2.不要试图费力地运用一些特别长的句子或者特别大的词汇

  If English is your second language,don’t try to make it hard on yourself by writing really long sentences andusing large vocabulary words. (Don’t say “internationalization”; just say“international.” Why use “metropolis” when you can just use “city”?) Rememberthat the readers are not hoping to be impressed by your vocabulary—they want tobe impressed by your story.

  如果英语是你的第二语言,那么不要试图费力地运用一些特别长的句子或者特别大的词汇。(不要用“internationalization”,用“international”就好了。另外,如果你可以用“city”,为什么要用“metropolis”呢?)记住,读者并不希望被你的词汇打动,而是被你的故事所打动。

  3.避免运用一些不恰当的理由

  Avoid using inappropriate reasons for why a particular college is attractive to you. (I have actually seen essays where the applicant described how much he “loved” the University of Chicago and wanted to date her, and another where the applicantwrote that NYU was attractive because she just loved the color purple on theNYU website.) You must read the website carefully to discover specificprograms, activities, curricula, distinguished professors (and the like) thatyou can point to and say, “THIS is why I want to go to University X.”

  在说明某所大学为何对你有吸引力时,避免运用一些不恰当的理由。(曾经看过申请者在短文中描述自己是如何如何热爱芝加哥大学,并想要和它约会的,而另一个人则在短文中说纽约大学吸引她仅仅是因为她喜欢纽约大学网站上的紫色)。你必须仔细浏览学校官方网站,以便发现一些具体的项目、活动、课程,以及著名的教授,诸如此类的,然后你就可以在短文中指出这就是你想要去XX大学的原因。

  4.不要只在短文中陈述学校多么好

  Do not tell the school how good it is. “I want to attend the prestigiousUniversity X because it is a top US college with an international reputation,”just sounds insincere.

  不要只在短文中陈述学校多么好。“我想要申请著名的XX大学,因为它是美国一所顶尖的大学,在国际上都享有盛誉。”这样说的话会显得不真诚。

  5.吸引读者的眼球

  Catch the reader’s attention in the first sentence of your essay by writing somethingdramatic or humorous. In one excellent essay I read, the applicant (hoping to majorin entomology), wrote this: “Ahhhh! There are bugs in the shampoo!"Doesn't that make you want to read more? (He then went on to describe how hismother had found one of his “science experiments” involving insects, and howexperiences like this made him want to study entomology.)

  在短文的开头写一些富有戏剧性的或者是幽默的东西,以吸引读者的眼球。曾有一篇优秀的短文,申请人想要修昆虫学专业,开头他是这样写的:“啊,洗发露里竟然有虫子!读完,难道你不会想要继续读下去吗?(接下来他又描述了他的母亲如何发现了他的一次昆虫“科学实验”,以及这些经历是怎样使他最终想要研究昆虫学的。)

  6.首尾呼应

  If you start with a story, you can end with some reference to the same story. (Ourentomology student, for example, could then mention his mother’s shock again inhis last paragraph.)

  如果你是以一个故事开头的,那么你可以在结尾的时候再提一下这个故事,所谓“点题”(例如,这位昆虫学的学生在最后一段再次提到他的母亲对他这些行为有多震惊。)

  7.突出自己的6个性

  Your purpose in writing your essay is to come across as a unique individual, one whostands out from all the other applicants and one whose writing style is lively,fresh, and different. For undergraduate essays, the personal details of yourlife and the struggles you have had to overcome will make good stories. Goodstories are memorable. You don’t have to be a perfect person; indeed, it may bethat any “flaws” you have will convince the reader that you are a multi-facetedperson who learns from your mistakes. These flaws don’t have to be terrible:You can describe the time that you made complete a fool of yourself before yourfriends. (Americans call this the “My most embarrassing moment” essay.) Thentell the reader what you learned from this experience.

  你的写作目的是为了突出你是一个独特的个体,一个在众多申请者中脱颖而出的人,而你的写作风格也应是生动活泼,新颖清新,与众不同的。对于本科生的文书写作来说,你的个人的生活经历以及奋斗历程都会成为比较好的故事素材。好的故事一定是令人印象深刻的。当然你不必是一个非常完美的人,相反恰恰是这些缺点会使读者相信你是多面的,你是能够从错误中吸取教训的。这些缺点不必是一些特别严重的:你可以描述你在朋友面前出糗的一次经历(美国称这类的文章为“我最尴尬时刻”类文章)。然后再告诉读者你从这次经历中学到了什么。

  8.尽可能使你的文章具体一些

  A lways try to make your writing as “concrete” as possible, meaning that you providespecific examples (or stories) to support your main points. Instead of justwriting, for example, “I spent two months doing chemistry research,” describethe nature of that research, what process you used, and what it taught you. Depthis more important than breadth. The reader will be more impressed by specificdetails about ONE of your experiences then a list of twenty experiences. (Savethe list of experiences for your resume.)

  尽可能使你的文章具体一些,这就意味着你要提供一些具体的事例或故事来支撑你的主要观点。例如,不要只是写“我做过两个月的化学研究”,而是应该详细地描述一下这次研究的性质,采用的方法,以及你收获了什么。文章的深度比广度更重要。比起罗列一堆你的个人经历,你的某一次经历中的一些细节更能打动读者(你可以把这些经历用在简历上)。

  9.陈述你的宗教信仰也是完全可以的

  It is perfectly all right to describe your particular religion in an undergraduateessay. Readers in the US come from many different religious backgrounds and theadmission officers will most likely be broad-minded and tolerant. The mainthing is not to try and “convert” the reader—you simply want to show how beinga Buddhist (or a Catholic, or a Christian, or whatever) has had a profoundimpact on your life.

  本科文书中陈述你的宗教信仰也是完全可以的。美国读者大都来自不同的宗教背景并且学校招生人员也都是心胸比较宽广的人。但不必试图改变读者的宗教信仰,你只需说明作为一名佛教徒(或者是天主教徒、基督徒等等)给你带来了怎样重大的影响。

  10.避免在推荐信中提到申请者的外貌

  Avoid describing any of the student’s physical attributes. Readers in the US become veryuncomfortable when they read that the applicant is “a lovely young girl” or a“strong handsome boy. (Admission officers are not allowed to evaluate you basedon what you look like.)

  避免在推荐信中描述任何有关申请者的身体特征。如果美国的读者读到说申请者是一个“年轻漂亮的女孩”,或者是一个“相貌英俊,身体强壮的男孩”时,他们会感到很不舒服。(学校那边也是不允许招生办人员根据长相来评估一个学生的。)

  11.推荐信中不要含有负面信息

  Do not include negative information in a letter of recommendation. Describe onlythe applicant’s successes, not failures.

  推荐信中不要包含一些负面信息。只需描述他们的成功,而非那些失败。

  12.CV写作要点:干净简单

  Resumes need to be very clean, clear, simple,and elegant. Do not include fancy fontsor distracting wingdings for bullets. Be sure that your main headings stand outfrom the text by putting them in bold, or italics, or a larger font size. Youwant whoever reads your resume to be impressed by your achievements andaccomplishments, not by your graphic design abilities.

  简历要干净简单,清晰明了,行文优美。不要出现一些花哨的字体或分散人注意力的字体。你可以通过加粗,倾斜,或者放大字体的方式,确保你的大标题和你的正文区别开来。因为你想要给读者留下深刻印象的是你取得的成就和成果,而非你的图文设计能力。

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